Saturday, February 15, 2014

Valentine's Day Haiku

Photo by Linda Rogers


My Valentine's Day...
Grocery Shop and clean house
This is how it starts

Time for Asian lunch
With my best friend~ the twin sis
Sat in dining room


Cozy booth, low light
Deep conversation, until...
Clap- Clap-what was that?

Man behind curtain
Bellied up at bar in back
Holds her hand in his

He drinks her sweet kiss
Loudly singing her praises
She's tonic and gin


Written for dVerse Poetics:
Coming Off the Sugar High-(A- not-so-Traditional Valentine)









41 comments:

  1. smiles...asian lunch sounds good to me...
    that last guy sounds like he is a bit of a character

    hey i know that picture....smiles.

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    1. Ha-that's right-you do know that picture. Your probably sick of it by now. Yes, the guy at the bar was smashed. The server told us he was a regular. Funny but sad at the same time. Claps, sings, talks to himself, yells without notice, etc....All in all, V-Day was wonderful.

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    1. Thanks Laurie-I really enjoy Haiku-I find it fun and challenging to use little words yet give the story/poem, meaning.

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  3. I am smiling at that last one ~ asian lunch sounds good, smiles ~

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    1. Sis and I love Asian food. I could eat it everyday :-)

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  4. Hi Linda! Good to see you here! Loved the last one!

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    1. Hi Audrey-thought I'd do Haiku in story form to describe my V-Day. Guy at the bar in the back was a trip. You never knew what he was gonna do or say. At least sis and I were tucked back in the dining room.

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  5. Am reminded of the line in Billy Joel's "Piano Man"
    "there's an old man sitting next to me
    makin' love to his tonic and gin"

    Quite a tale captured in that lunch of yours!

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    1. That is exactly the line I was thinking of when I wrote this poem. No doubt his drink was his date for Valentines Day. Glad it brought that song to mind like I wanted it to. Hope you had a good V-Day.

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  6. Asian lunch speaks of variety, hot and spicy plus rice! It'll be engrossing despite the slight distraction of the character with tonic and gin. Nicely Linda!

    Hank

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    1. I was too hungry to let the guy in the bar bother me. LOL We had pan fried dumplings, egg rolls and egg foo young from scratch. It was amazing. I'll def go back to this place.

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  7. I really enjoyed this little bit of 'slice of life.' And yes, an Asian lunch sounds like a special event to me too.

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    1. I could eat Asian food every day-Hope you had a great V-Day, Mary. Thanks for the visit.

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  8. oh i was smiling at that close - cool to weave some taste in...love me some asian food...hmmm - cool haikus linda

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    1. Hope you had a good Valentine's Day Claudia-thought I'd just do Haiku in story form, about my V-Day.Guy at the bar was def making love to his tonic and gin. Tis what makes life interesting :-)

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  9. An Asian restaurant is a nice place for a day out with your sister. Great series of haiku!

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    1. Hi Gabriella-Sis and I love trying out new restaurant's. We'll def go back to this one. Hope you had a lovely V-Day.

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  10. you create a whole little play in a few lies. very original take.

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    1. Thought I'd use haiku to share my story of V-Day. It was a great day with sis. Hope yours was nice too.

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    1. It was a lovely day and hope yours was too. Thanks for coming by :-)

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  12. You know how much I love writing and reading haiku's .....
    Happy Valentine's
    Day to your sister and you
    Love you my dear friend

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    1. How fun to see you here Susan-I hope you and your hubby had a great V-Day. You guys are a great example of true love through thick and thin. I love you too my dear buddy.

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  13. Asian lunch sounds delicious ... I like the contrast of the two scenes ... the love shared with your sister ... and how sad all that guy had as company was his drink. Nicely done :)

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    1. Thanks for the kind words on my story form Haiku, Loredana. It really was sad to see that guy at the bar with his lover, Mrs. Hard Liquor. I have never really known lonliness as I've always had my built in best friend-my twin. I feel for those who have noone.

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  14. Lovely lattice of narrative haikus ending in sweet surprise!

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    1. So glad you enjoyed my narrative Haiku on V-Day. Love that word 'lattice.' Nicely penned.

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  15. Nice to spend Valentine's Day having lunch with your twin sister. The poor fella at the bar probably didn't even know it was Sweetheart's Day--has forgotten such things. Good contrast of circumstances.

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    1. It is a very sad contrast vb-Your probably right that he didn't know it was V-Day. It certainly spiced up lunch with sis. Lots of hootin and hollerin at the bar.

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  17. Your haiku V-Day piece was delicious & different; Shanyn did invite some to use classic forms; & you rocked it. Asian & Mexican with a sprinkling of East Indian are mainstays for the wife & I.

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    1. What a lovely comment Glenn-I really appreciate it. Sis and I love Asian, Mexican and Indian. It's tasty and healthy.

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    1. Thanks Mystic Mom-hope your V-Day was as eventful as mine.

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  19. I love the connection you have with your sister, it's really sweet. My sisters are my best friends too, and two of us have a psych degree as well, wink.

    Sounds like you had a great night, smiles. Happy to have stopped by.

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  20. Thanks for the sweet comment on my connection with sis. She is truly my best friend and sounds like you know exactly what I'm talking about. Nice to hear you share in the psych degree-thrilled you came by my blog :-)

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  21. Anyone celebrating his Valentine with a mistress of tonic an gin.. oh that's hard.. a twin sister is a lot better.

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    1. I know-it was hard to watch. He was absolutely wasted and sitting all alone-except for his drink. LOL

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  22. Thanks vie visiting my blog and commenting!

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    1. My pleasure Gabriella.Thanks for coming by :-)

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